• Steve@communick.news
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    4 hours ago

    While your certainly sounds better with the word choice in the headline, it doesn’t reflect the actual facts of events.

    “Father of an 18 year old,” establishes the father as the subject, and the 18 year old as a specifying factor. So the the rest of the sentence states, it was the father who was “fatally shot by Ohio police” and “charged with hitting and killing deputy”. It’s still unclear if it was the father or the deputy who was “with car”.

    Where as my commas separate the facts accurately. Their strangeness comes from the extremely poor word choice and order of facts in the headline.

    “Father of,” establishes the father as the subject. “18 year old fatally shot by Ohio police,” is together a single specifier. “charged with hitting and killing deputy,” states what happened to the father. And finally “, with car” is what the father used, to hit and kill the deputy.

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      4 hours ago

      “Father of,” establishes the father as the subject. “18 year old fatally shot by Ohio police,”

      No. The subject is the father yes, but you can’t cut off the “of” that way.

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        45 minutes ago

        But using those words you’d have to, to establish that it isn’t actually the father who was shot, but the 18 year old.

        The terrible use commas comes from the terrible word choice. Rewriting the entire sentence would be the best option.